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"Wonderland" -Part 20 -Final part

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Post  Prisca Wed Feb 27, 2008 7:59 pm

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Post  girl1035 Wed Feb 27, 2008 8:08 pm

This is sooooooooooooooooooooooooooo sad. She just cant die. Evil or Very Mad
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Post  Riikka Wed Feb 27, 2008 11:59 pm

She can't die... Sad this is so sad...
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Post  x Imke x Thu Feb 28, 2008 4:22 pm

Aaaaaw Crying or Very sad This is so sad! Crying or Very sad Tina is right, she can't die!!! Sad Sad Sad
Although this story is really amazing! And I can't certainly wait for the next part!
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Post  Sergo Thu Feb 28, 2008 5:23 pm

i want it too Sad
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Post  Prisca Thu Feb 28, 2008 6:18 pm

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Post  Heli Thu Feb 28, 2008 8:20 pm

Part 19

Few days after that conversation Javi and Sofía were again here. But this time I asked them to stay here.
“I think…I can’t…be here…so long…anymore.” I said.
Even talking took so much energy. Javi looked at me sadly.
“Of course we’re here.” he promised and caressed my hand.
I smiled tiredly. In the evening Sofía was sleeping next to me in my bed. Javi was sitting next to my bed and he just kept my hand in his. I think I must have fallen asleep. Because when I wake up it was so dark. But Javi was still sitting next to me and watching me.
“Did I fall asleep?” I asked tired.
“Yes.” Javi just answered.
“What time it is?” I asked then.
“It’s about two o’clock.” he replied.
I smiled tired.
“Could you please sing something for me?” I asked then.
“Of course. What you want to hear?” Javi said.
“I don’t know. You can decide.” I answered tired.
I closed my eyes and for a while it was totally silent. But then I heard that Javi started to hum silently. Then he started to sing ‘Esta vez si’.

I listened to his amazing voice. And he continued by singing some random songs. And I had fallen asleep again. When I woke up next time, I saw Javi still sitting next to me.
“Have you…slept…at all?” I asked.
But this time it was much harder to speak. And Javi noticed that.
“No, I haven’t slept at all. But you, don’t speak anything. I see you don’t have energy to do that anymore.” he said quietly.
I just nodded. I stared at him all the time. I wanted to remember what he looked like. ( Like I wouldn’t forget that ever. )
And Sofía was still sleeping next to me. Tears ran on my cheeks because I understood that I couldn’t ever see her growing up and see her kids and family. Javi wiped off my tears.
“Sshh…Don’t cry. Everything will be okay.” he calmed me.
I smiled a little. Then I closed my eyes and took few deep breaths and whispered:” Te quiero mucho.”
I had used all my energy for that. So, I just lied on my bed and then I heard Javi’s answer: “Te quiero mucho también.”

Just when the sun’s first beams hit my face that morning. I took a final breath and at the same time I felt Sofía’s breathe on my cheek and Javi’s hand on mine.

... Rolling Eyes
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Post  Prisca Thu Feb 28, 2008 8:27 pm

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Post  emilia Thu Feb 28, 2008 9:34 pm

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Post  girl1035 Thu Feb 28, 2008 10:00 pm

Such a sad part. Sad Sad Sad Sad Sad Sad Sad Sad Sad Sad Sad Sad Sad Sad Sad Sad Sad Sad
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Post  Riikka Thu Feb 28, 2008 10:13 pm

You let her die Neutral Sad
It's amazing part but too sad Sad
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Post  x Imke x Thu Feb 28, 2008 11:09 pm

She..... Did she... Shocked No... Crying or Very sad Crying or Very sad Crying or Very sad


This is so sad but so good story!! Really wonderful Crying or Very sad Crying or Very sad
I guess the next part will be even more sad Crying or Very sad
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Post  Sergo Thu Feb 28, 2008 11:17 pm

I can't believe she really died Shocked
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Post  Prisca Fri Feb 29, 2008 3:01 am

me neitheir... this is too bad Sad Sad
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Post  Heli Fri Feb 29, 2008 8:12 pm

Part 20

A month later

Javi was walking at the beach with Sofía. This last month had been so hard to him. But he had to stand because of Sofía. Her funeral had been yesterday and he wanted to come here at the beach with Sofía. This had been one of her loveliest places. Sofía was still little confused because mom had gone away now. But Javi decided to try to explain things better today.

They were sitting on the sand and Sofía was making a sand castle when she suddenly asked: “Where mom is?”
Javi took her to sit on his feet. “Mom is up there right now.” he said and pointed at the sky.
“But why she can’t be here with us? I miss her. I want that she’s with us now.” Sofía said sadly.
“I know, I know. I would like to have her here too. But mom is an angel now. And she’s in the Heaven.” Javi explained.
“What the Heaven is?” Sofía asked confused.
“Well, actually. I don’t know. Everybody have their own opinions about that. But to my mind, it’s some kind of Wonderland. Because you can do there what you want, I think.” he told.
“I want be there also then.” Sofía said.
“Someday you’ll go there also. Like we all.” Javi said.
“I just want to be with mom.” Sofía said sadly.
“I know. But mom is your guardian angel right now. She watches that anything bad can’t happen to you.” Javi explained and fondled her hair gently.
“This all is so complicated.” Sofía sighted.
“I know. But when you’re old enough you’ll understand. But let’s go home.” Javi said and grabbed her hand.

And so, they left from the beach, hand in hand, a man and a girl, a dad and a daughter, together.

Epilogue

I found this writing from her computer. I didn’t know that she had written all this. But now I’ve written it till the end. And I’m going to show this to Sofía when she’s older. So she can know at least a little what kind of mom she had. I’m really glad that I knew her. Even it ended so quickly. And I still miss her. I think I can’t ever stop thinking about her. And I think I can’t ever love any other woman like her. It was something…different…something unique. And I don’t know will this pain free my soul ever. But I have to stand this. It’s all because of Sofía. But this was her story. And I’m so sorry that it had to end like this.
~Javi~

THE END

“Dream on you boys
I know it feels cold around now
But we will raise our voices someday
Leave the past behind
And smile for what is here now
We will be as one all the way
On the way to wonderland
On the way to wonderland

We don’t know wonderland
We don’t know how to get there
We will keep on searching for the way
We dream all the way
Of the moments we'll have there
We can see them all clear today
On the way to wonderland, On the way

Sometimes the night is cold
There are times we hurt inside
Sometimes the goal seems too far away
We don’t know wonderland
We’ve heard about the ones who’ve been there
It’s a place made for us they say
On the way to wonderland

We see the sun we’re gonna run
Towards the wonderland
The only place where we belong
The search will never end
We push against the wind and rain
Beating tears and pain
Together we can find wonderland”
Sunrise Avenue – Wonderland


Sunrise Avenue - Wonderland: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Tn9Tt89bDXI

Dedication goes surprisingly to D’Nash, especially to Javi… And of course to all of you who read this even the end was sad… Again… Rolling Eyes But somebody here has to make you cry, right? Wink I think I’ll quit writing sad stories for a while. So you don’t need to cry because of me anymore… Rolling Eyes Anyway, thanks for reading this! I really appreciate it!


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Post  girl1035 Fri Feb 29, 2008 8:16 pm

This was amazing story. But so sad. Sad I will miss it.
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Post  emilia Fri Feb 29, 2008 8:58 pm

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I really get tears in my eyes when i read this part...
Great but sad story...
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Post  Prisca Fri Feb 29, 2008 9:25 pm

this story was really sad but i loved Smile Smile


fantastic work... Wink Wink
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Post  Heli Fri Feb 29, 2008 9:41 pm

emilia wrote:I really get tears in my eyes when i read this part...
Wow.. Shocked
Then I think I managed to write sad story.. Rolling Eyes

But thanks peeps! Very Happy
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Post  Sergo Fri Feb 29, 2008 10:54 pm

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Post  Riikka Fri Feb 29, 2008 11:03 pm

Crying or Very sad It's lovely story but once again too sad end Sad
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Post  x Imke x Sat Mar 01, 2008 4:31 pm

Naw this part was sad but great though Crying or Very sad And I have tears in my eyes too Sad

Oh now I have to tell you something Laughing
Yesterday or the day before yesterday when I lay in bed I listened to my ipod and a very sad song was on and then I remembered the part where that girl was in hospital and Javi cried... man I almost had to cry Laughing Rolling Eyes

So that also shows that this story is amazing! Very Happy
And I don't mind if you write more sad stories or just happy stories, you're a great writer!! cheers
I hope you're going to write another story What a Face Cool
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